Post by Rue Tian Slyth7 on Nov 19, 2007 10:37:00 GMT -5
Hello and welcome to Hogwarts Magic! Sorry for the delay in your approval process. 
There are things you need to change before I can approve you.
1- Each new member is required to start out with a first through third year. So please change this so Roxanne is a first, second, or third year.
2- Because your character will need to be a first through third year, the physical description will need to be altered; omitting any mention of curves or something a 17 year old would have.
3- You need a lot more in your history. Don't get me wrong, what you have is great, but it needs to be at least 6 sentences long. If you could do what you did for your physical description and personality description, that'd be great. Maybe questions like; why does she feel so disconnected from her parents? Or... what exactly does she do to pursue her career? might help.
4- The last thing is the format you have this in. Could you please move her wand and pet in their appropriate places? The other things you have might fit into one of her other categories, too.
Once you have made these changes, you may submit your biography in this thread.
Character Name: Roxanne Kare (a.k.a Rox)
Age:17
Year: 7th
House: Ravenclaw
Blood: Muggle Born
Physical Description: Rox is about 5'7" and curvy, with pale skin that is lightly sprinkled with freckles. She has large expressive eyes and their color can never be truely defined for they seem to always be changing, but normaly they start off a dark blue then fade to green then to a brown-red. Her hair is long going about 8 inches below her sholders and a deep dark red (with a single streak of bright blue on the right side and about 3 inches in width) which always has the feeling of bed head and her bangs have a habit of falling into her eyes. Rox had more or less a heart shaped face with a pouty lower lip and a thinner top one, also she had high cheek bones and always the look of that-she-was-up-to-something. Normally she doesn't bother with a whole lot of make-up durning the week just a bit of mascara and lately she's been using a red purple eye liner which make her eyes even more intense, then on the weekends or when she's going out she gets all dolled up.
When not in her school uniform, she is normaly dressed for comfort. She wears novelty t-shirts or hoodies and jeans, yet is she is going out she will get all dressed up. Normally she wears a few fun braceletes on her right wrist and has a thumb ring on her left hand which is just a simple band; her necklace is always a pendent on a black cord, sometimes she has a key other times she has a runestone and every now and then she has a locket.
The over all vibe to her apperance is that of dark mysterious innocence.
Personality: Fiery, nerdy, independent, mysterious are words that are most commonly used to describe Rox. She is very quiet until she needs to speak up, and her words always are her defence; sarcasm drips from her tongue wether it is playful or not depends on the situtation. Rox is a self proclaimed nerd, she loves to read and is fasinated by history. Known as the fiery redhead through out school, she lives up to her name. Never one to give out to much information about herself she is a mystery to many of the other students, and she is always up to something.
She doesn't trust easily yet gets along with almost everybody, and has a habit of thinking she can carry the world on her sholders. Very independent and stubborn she'll never back down when she believes she's right; still she is playful and flirty, and loves having a good laugh with friends.
Her Sun and Moon sign are in Scorpio, which tells alot about her personality.
She is true to herself and refuses to change for anybody; loves to be what is unexpected.
History: As a child she was shy and quiet, always feeling different and it wasn't until 2 years into Hogwarts that she decided to stop caring what others thought and be true to herself.
She has never really gotten along with her parents who are both muggles, she just feels so disconnected to them.
Now at Hogwarts she is having fun and is pursuing a career as a history of magic professor.
She's ready for what life throws at her next.
Other
Pet: A grey female cat with bright blue eyes named Ice
Wand: Hornbeam, 12 inches, Dragon Heartstring, bendy, excellent at Charms, but tends to fail at Transfiguration
Favorite color: Dark blue
Favorite Class: Charms and History of Magic (only because she loves the material)
Least Favorite: Potions (she's never been big on sciences)
Hobbies: going by the lake and reading, hanging out with friends, loves word searches, getting into debates, having fun while she can
She's always up to something...
There are things you need to change before I can approve you.
1- Each new member is required to start out with a first through third year. So please change this so Roxanne is a first, second, or third year.
2- Because your character will need to be a first through third year, the physical description will need to be altered; omitting any mention of curves or something a 17 year old would have.
3- You need a lot more in your history. Don't get me wrong, what you have is great, but it needs to be at least 6 sentences long.
If you could do what you did for your physical description and personality description, that'd be great. Maybe questions like; why does she feel so disconnected from her parents? Or... what exactly does she do to pursue her career? might help. 4- The last thing is the format you have this in. Could you please move her wand and pet in their appropriate places? The other things you have might fit into one of her other categories, too.
Once you have made these changes, you may submit your biography in this thread.
Character Name: Roxanne Kare (a.k.a Rox)
Age:17
Year: 7th
House: Ravenclaw
Blood: Muggle Born
Physical Description: Rox is about 5'7" and curvy, with pale skin that is lightly sprinkled with freckles. She has large expressive eyes and their color can never be truely defined for they seem to always be changing, but normaly they start off a dark blue then fade to green then to a brown-red. Her hair is long going about 8 inches below her sholders and a deep dark red (with a single streak of bright blue on the right side and about 3 inches in width) which always has the feeling of bed head and her bangs have a habit of falling into her eyes. Rox had more or less a heart shaped face with a pouty lower lip and a thinner top one, also she had high cheek bones and always the look of that-she-was-up-to-something. Normally she doesn't bother with a whole lot of make-up durning the week just a bit of mascara and lately she's been using a red purple eye liner which make her eyes even more intense, then on the weekends or when she's going out she gets all dolled up.
When not in her school uniform, she is normaly dressed for comfort. She wears novelty t-shirts or hoodies and jeans, yet is she is going out she will get all dressed up. Normally she wears a few fun braceletes on her right wrist and has a thumb ring on her left hand which is just a simple band; her necklace is always a pendent on a black cord, sometimes she has a key other times she has a runestone and every now and then she has a locket.
The over all vibe to her apperance is that of dark mysterious innocence.
Personality: Fiery, nerdy, independent, mysterious are words that are most commonly used to describe Rox. She is very quiet until she needs to speak up, and her words always are her defence; sarcasm drips from her tongue wether it is playful or not depends on the situtation. Rox is a self proclaimed nerd, she loves to read and is fasinated by history. Known as the fiery redhead through out school, she lives up to her name. Never one to give out to much information about herself she is a mystery to many of the other students, and she is always up to something.
She doesn't trust easily yet gets along with almost everybody, and has a habit of thinking she can carry the world on her sholders. Very independent and stubborn she'll never back down when she believes she's right; still she is playful and flirty, and loves having a good laugh with friends.
Her Sun and Moon sign are in Scorpio, which tells alot about her personality.
She is true to herself and refuses to change for anybody; loves to be what is unexpected.
History: As a child she was shy and quiet, always feeling different and it wasn't until 2 years into Hogwarts that she decided to stop caring what others thought and be true to herself.
She has never really gotten along with her parents who are both muggles, she just feels so disconnected to them.
Now at Hogwarts she is having fun and is pursuing a career as a history of magic professor.
She's ready for what life throws at her next.
Other
Pet: A grey female cat with bright blue eyes named Ice
Wand: Hornbeam, 12 inches, Dragon Heartstring, bendy, excellent at Charms, but tends to fail at Transfiguration
Favorite color: Dark blue
Favorite Class: Charms and History of Magic (only because she loves the material)
Least Favorite: Potions (she's never been big on sciences)
Hobbies: going by the lake and reading, hanging out with friends, loves word searches, getting into debates, having fun while she can
She's always up to something...